Monday, September 30, 2013

My Favorite Mistake by Nick Brennerman


                  My favorite mistake happen when I was eleven years old.  When I was eleven years old my parents took siblings and I to Lagoon. My parents had been planning this trip for weeks . I couldn’t wait to get there. My parents woke us up at like seven o’clock. We stay there for the entire time and almost until closing time.
                  We went on a lot of fun rides. I especially like the rapid river. There was this waterfall that just drenched me. The water was so cold, it just chilled me all the way to the bone.  I’m just glad my siblings took me on that ride because it was so hot out there I need that. Right after that we went and got some dinner from Subway, it was good.  After we had dinner my stepbrother pressure me in to going on the Wicked. This was the first day it open. The top was one hundred fifty feet in the air.
                   We had to wait for what seem like forever just to get the front of the ride. We finally got to the front of the line and on to the ride. I was so scared to get on the ride. I just didn’t want to get on the ride, it looked too unstable. I thought something would go wrong when I was on the ride, but my siblings pressured me into going on the wicked and I let them.
                  So we went to get in line. It was so long. So I told them that we should wait, but they said that this was the only time we could ride it today.  We got in the line to wait to get on the ride. It took us nearly an hour just to get to the front.  My siblings and I talked to a couple of girls that were also going to ride. The closer we got to the front, the more nervous I got. When we finally got to the front and I was being strapped, I was scared. My favorite mistake was that I didn’t pass out on the ride. Because the ride was awesome. I’m glad that I let my stepbrother to pressure me into riding the Wicked.

3 comments:

  1. Why did you let them pressure you? I liked that you overcame your fear. Next time you should try to not be repetitive in telling your story. ~Elizah

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  2. Nice Nick. You did way better than I expected you to do (: Buttah, my suggestion is not to repeat so much in your paragraphs. Paragraph 3 and 4 are really similar about waiting forever then changing it to one hour then talking to girls. Otherwise, good job Nick!
    -Maile "Kaleo" Laita

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  3. Don't let people push you around like that, you have to stick up for yourself. Its cool that you loved the ride. Nest time I suggest that you explain things one time instead of twice. -*Matt C*-

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